[背诵范文]
Dear President，
I' m writing to give some suggestions to further protectthe of Tibetan antelopes.As..is..often. .reported, too manyTibetan antelopes are..being.hunted.and.killed illegally fortheir fur，from..w.hich ..the .illega..hunters...can..mak...greatprofits. As a result, the number of the Tibetan antelopes isdecreasing rapidly from about 1,000，000 in 1990 to lessthan 100,000 at present.

Immediate measures mu.st..be..taken to improve thepresent situation. Firstly，the importance of protecting theTibetan antelopes should be promoted.Secondly, would youprovide more money for the conservation of the Tibetanantelopes? Last but not least,I.su.ggest.that.some.xolunteers.besentthere to.help.protect the Tibetan antelopes.
These are my suggestions and 1hope. .they .could..meansom.ething for a better future of the Tibetan antelopes.
Looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

[高分亮点]
1.本文作为一封建议信，格式正确,行文连贯，其中提建议的部分使用了firstly, secondly, last but not least等进行分条，使文章条理清晰。
2.作者写作功底深厚，对语言的掌控力较强，全文有多处用词生动形象,表意恰当充分,如decrease rapidly, from ... to, immediatemeasures, improve, promote等。
3.文中多处使用被动句,为文章增色不少，如are being huntedand killed, must be taken, should be promoted, be sent there等。
4.全文使用了很多高级句式，如定语从句“As is oftenreported“from which the illegal hunters can make great profits"，suggest引导的宾语从句中的虚拟语气，Ihope后跟宾语从句等。